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Comment by Rachel Van Blankenship on September 29, 2009 at 10:33

Great page. I agree with Lindsey about the headline. Maybe all it needs is a different color on the '-a-' I really like how you presented the recipe and nice movement with the photos. Again, think about how your shapes fit a story. You could have made a nice pull-quote at the bottom instead. I don't think I would have put another photo down there, but maybe you could have moved the pull quote to the bottom and if you had a one column photo that could be presented smaller, run that in place of the quote in the story, so the text has some break.

Comment by Lindsey Jones on September 29, 2009 at 9:59

The colors and shapes of this package are really nice ... but I think the headline could have used some more POP. And that symbol at the bottom looks kind of random. Like you're trying to fill an empty space ... another photo would have worked smashingly.